FUNNYJUNK READ!. OK, just to say a few things. <br /> 1. I am changing the title to Pyromantis-X<br /> 2. I will be continuing this story under the  DarkFall
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FUNNYJUNK READ!. OK, just to say a few things. <br /> 1. I am changing the title to Pyromantis-X<br /> 2. I will be continuing this story under the

OK, just to say a few things. <br />
1. I am changing the title to Pyromantis-X<br />
2. I will be continuing this story under the username PyromantisX. dont bother sending &quot;darkfall&quot; any messages or anything. srry for those of you who already have.

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We all hate Twilight. That' s a well known fact. Fm relatively new to this site, But it
only tool: me a happyhour to mature that out. And I agree.
I have always enjoyed reading books. I have also made several {failed} attempts at
writing one, although from the fragments of what I have written, people say it would
Be a great book if only I ' it.
Well here is ' s answer to twilight. If this makes it to the top ‘ID, I will
Begin writing a new book in all the bloody glory of a true vampire story. No sparkly
gay map. cheek it out below.
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but still maintaining the appearance a mid security level lat}. on chickens, rats,
birds, and other animals were carried out in the upper levels.
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three scientists who had security clearance , high enough leveled enter the dungeon like
lo . some said that screams could he heard ‘From hemione the thick titanium blast:
doors, while others tried to shut them up.
one thing was certain, the truth was tar worse than EHW one suspected. Genetic
testing was taking place on humans. H imans whose onle fault: had tween a pattern oi: D NA
deemed as adequate tor testing by E. V. E. These men and women were accused with false
crimes, and sentenced to death row: ode’ weren' t dead.
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these individuals. Gradually, theg changd. Thee} grew taller, stronger: smarter. Their ii: -‘one
structure changed com widened, thickened, small protrusions began
l] ranching o utr, aurther reinforcing theire} odins. Foremost among these we re two incredible’
sharp teeth. Theg were , and had small grooves d own the side. Later on, their
would grow small packets at poison that uld drain down these ducts when wanted.
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lumps deformed human farest, with minimal hrafn activity Three clicl not experience at-: 3
dramatic results. The ‘Final two experienced the } c: Iare changes ‘From all atthe rigorous
testing and experiments.
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no communication, and complaints about husbands and tethers not returning home,
CA/ C, sent: out: a task torso to discovercard had happened. As the ch, er. OPE soldiers
walked carefully through the lal: , looking tor someone alive. Theg ‘Found no one.
There were no bodies at all blood was splattered on walls, the floor, and everywhere their
looked. The shattered titanium doors invited the soldiers to enter the atthe
Th e y were never heard ‘From stairs.
If you enjoyed this, " mit believe I am saying this..} thumbs it up.
Remember, I will only continue to write this if this reaches the top -Io. Pm and mm
vampire sparkly map. Thumbs up for blood!
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#14 - DarkFall (01/14/2010) [-]
I have decided to write the next chapter. even though this didn't reach the top 10, there were definitely people interested. i guess I'll see how it goes. i will definitely be putting a lot more time into this one, so watch for it. im gonna try and have it posted in about 10 hours. thats midnight for me. if not, i'll get it posted tomorrow. thx for support and suggestions. :D
#15 to #14 - DarkFall (01/14/2010) [-]
I have also decided to name it "The Chronicles of Blood." any comments on that?
#16 to #15 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
No "Chronicles", it's been over done. Try looking up the word blood in different languages. Like blood in spanish is sangre. Sangre could be another lab testing thing...and so on. Just a suggestion.
#17 to #16 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
hmm... i like that idea. thx dude. i will try it out.

~DarkFall~
#194 to #15 - bloomerang (01/14/2010) [-]
What about "Sanguine"
#303 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
Good plot, however the writing itself could use a little work. Just the phrasing of a couple of sentences, and maybe some expansion on some parts. I would definitely read this novel. :)
User avatar #286 - radon (01/14/2010) [-]
Anybody else see the resemblance to Black Mesa, post cascade?
#270 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
If you are reading this Darkfall guy, please note that this is funny junk, and is not meant for writing, even though you got 1104 thumbs up. It is a very good idea, and has great potential, but please do what other writers do, and keep it to yourself and work on it when you have time. ^_^
You should check other websites, I know for a fact that there is a writing circle in "Twilightsucks.com" where you can put your ideas, and get other writer's feed back. Have a good one.
#327 to #270 - soviergn (01/15/2010) [-]
wow usually i thumb down these kind of comments for being uneducated twats but you actually give him a solution and a pheasable alternative. good job anon
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#12 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
******* BRILLIANT
User avatar #312 - darksamus (01/14/2010) [-]
I enjoyed it. What was here was intriguing enough to make me read more. As a small criticism, your writing appears to be little unsophisticated, almost unfinished. But, even so, it was clear and engaging.
#299 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
Thats actually a pretty good story. If you do end up finishing it, please post a a picture of it and say title it The Opposite Of Twilight
#294 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
I like that you want to make a new vampire story. Of course, to publish this, you MUST make sure it is less typical. If you make some interesting plot changes, this could really be something. Keep working on it, and good luck on the book!
User avatar #297 to #294 - wolfgrl (01/14/2010) [-]
also though, theres so many good vampire novels that are plenty bloody and not girly or romantic at all. and they're not written by amateurs.
#271 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
I do not like this. Funnyjunk should be funny. I remember the old days of funnyjunk, days where if it was not funny it was not liked, but now statements get more thumbs up than jokes. It is sad.
#260 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
Add some bacon for the canadians!
#254 - soviergn (01/14/2010) [-]
just a suggestion but if you want a really honest opinion find the appropriate section on 4chan (something thats not /b/ though posting it there would be funny) and give it to them.
User avatar #253 - GrammarOne (01/14/2010) [-]
I honestly must say that I like this, great concept and idea, the only thing I have a problem with is it sounds a lot like other vampire films/books (Excluding Twilight) what I think you need is something to seperate it from the crowd and make it stand out... other than that I love it!

Sincerely, Grammar One.

PS. I think Darkfall sounds better than "Pyromantis-X."
#238 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
awsomee:) rather readd that then twilight..
#127 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
Keep writing. It seems like an amazing story, SO MUCH better than this twilight **** .
User avatar #18 - squeaky (01/14/2010) [-]
very good. very very good. write the book
#123 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
please oh dear god keep writing, send me the manuscript, i love reading and will gladly give u feedback, im into this type of stuff so yeah, YAY GOOD BOOKS (ima bookfag so ya.... except for the fag part, but i do enjoy a good book)
User avatar #317 - patriotic canadian (01/14/2010) [-]
sort of reminds me of the maximum ride books (highly reccomend those)


i think this is a good backstory. some first person narritive would be great ^_^

do want :)
#342 to #317 - John Cena (11/11/2010) [-]
Maximum Ride=AWSOME
CANADA=A WORHTLESS FAIL OF A COUNTRY! HOW DARE THEY LET CANADIANS READ, IF I WAS CHUCK NORRIS I WOULD BITCHSLAP YOU THROUGH THIS COMPUTER SCREEN!


found ya again BITCH!
User avatar #343 to #342 - patriotic canadian (11/12/2010) [-]
why are you wasting your time with me?
User avatar #136 - garykn (01/14/2010) [-]
i am totally holding you to this. write the book.
#129 - John Cena (01/14/2010) [-]
You shouldn't write because of what other people say you should write because you want to, I also have fragments of stories that I think could turn out pretty good and I hope once I finish school that I can start an exceptional book and finish it and hopefully publish it.
Keep writing if you like doing it not just because other people tell you too.....
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